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Offline Jack Pine

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Jack Pine
« on: September 06, 2018, 08:15:00 PM »
NAME: Jack Pine

FACTION: unaffiliated.
RANK: commander
SPECIES: human
AGE: 23
SEX: male
EYES: crimson
HAIR: white
SKIN: normal pigmentation
  • Neera - daughter
  • Sarah - mother
PERSONALITY: Jack is fairly level headed and calm. He has a brilliant mind for strategy and tactics. He's driven to help those in need, no matter the cost, and he's willing to go as far as combat in certain cases. Two of his personal short comings are being very stubborn, and haunted by a past he can't leave behind.

STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES (Required: 2 Weaknesses Minimum) : He is proficient in weapons handling, hand to hand, strategy, piloting, driving, demolitions. He is tactically minded, strong willed, and understanding. However he has a tendency to let some of his older darker habits resurface if under stress, he is also very emotionally dependant of those he cares about. If one of said people are hurt, or killed, becoming unstable varying by degree of seriousness.

Jack has a soldier's body, even if with a lean frame which is still well toned. His body features numerous scars from countless battles. Dominating his back is a tattoo of a crimson sword with black wings. He has medium to short hair and a goatee, with his hair being spiked slightly in the front. A large scar passes over his right eye, while a double helix tattoo curves around his left.
FORCE RANK: acolyte
FORCE POWERS: force lightning acolyte
Non Force User Skill Focuses: Soldier
A small ship that barely counts as a frigate, with a topside bridge and 5 decks. It is armed with basic weapon systems, and has plasma based engines.
Deck layout
Deck 1: bridge and communications room
Deck 2: recreation and captain's quarters, engineering.
Deck 3: passenger quarters, armory
Deck 4: Cargo, escape module
Deck 5: vehicle bay

Revenant powered armor
S6-MWS2 (DMR) blaster rifle
S6-P2 blaster pistol
Family holo
Assault pack
Arm terminal
Neural implant
Speeder bike
Jack was the product of a corporation who wanted to custom tailor the prototype of a line of perfect soldiers. Jack was the prototype, but broke away from his enslavement and programming to fight what is actually right. Providing a safe haven for his cloned siblings, and anyone else who seeks to work towards building a better future for everyone. He runs around the galaxy looking for more like minded people, as well as doing hired work as a soldier of fortune. Due to the experiments and methods used to make him, Jack is very force sensitive.
Jack Pine-,
« Last Edit: September 06, 2018, 11:21:42 PM by Jack Pine »
Just a mercenary looking for bullets like I look for all the wrong places.

Offline Asellus Sunstalker

Re: Jack Pine
« Reply #1 on: September 08, 2018, 03:39:41 PM »
Jack Pine Hello, I'll be reviewing your submission today. :)

I have a few big questions that are in need of answers from looking at this.
  • How did he break out of his training/conditioning?
  • How did he get that big ship?
  • Why does a human have red eyes?
  • Why does a good guy who is so nice and wants to right the wrongs of the galaxy use force lightning?

Start by answering these, and we'll where things go. Also, you can only have Force Powers OR Non-Force User Skills listed. Not both. This is to prevent overpowered characters, like I explained in the Discord. You can put his trained skills into strengths and weakness if you want, but its assumed he'll be relying more heavily on his Force powers if you go that route.

Also, your items will need their own submissions after this.
« Last Edit: September 08, 2018, 03:43:59 PM by Asellus Sunstalker »

Offline Jack Pine

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Re: Jack Pine
« Reply #2 on: September 08, 2018, 03:41:49 PM »
I've already been working on those with Magan who was reviewing it I thought.
Just a mercenary looking for bullets like I look for all the wrong places.

Offline Asellus Sunstalker

Re: Jack Pine
« Reply #3 on: September 08, 2018, 03:44:41 PM »
It's me, I'm putting that there so you can find it easier without having to scroll through the Discord chat. :)


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